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1、注重写作句式 提高表达能力,Jiashan senior high school 沈雪芳,2012年浙江省普通高考考试说明对写作的要求:,清楚、连贯地传递信息,表达意思; 2. 有效运用所学语言知识。 要求考生根据提示,用英语写一篇100-120个词的短文。提示形 式有图画、图表、文字等。满分30分。,一、明确高中各年级段写作的要求:,2012年浙江省英语高考调研卷的作文:,2012年浙江省英语高考调研卷的作文范文:,Too Much Care Spoils a Child As is shown in the picture above, the plant is being ruined
2、by too much watering. Perhaps, people do this out of good intentions, but good intentions may not necessarily bring about good results. Like the plant in the picture, childern today receive too much care. For example, parents tend to do almost everything for their childern, from making beds to carry
3、ing school bags. By dong this , they are trying to show their love for their childern in their best possible way. They believe what they do will make their childrens life easier and better. However, what children really need is to experience difficulties and take challenges so that they can grow up
4、to be more independent. Too much water kills a plant, and too much care spoils a child.,what,why,how,优秀书面表达的5个要求:,1.外在美 一篇优秀的书面表达首先就是一件艺术品,书写清楚,字母大小匀称,单词间距适当,没有明显修改痕迹。 2.结构美 一篇好的书面表达不能一段到底,应有合理的段落层次,让人感觉条理清晰。每一段落要有一个主题句和几个支撑句。 3.词汇美 从书面表达的评分标准看,运用高级词汇对提高书面表达的“档次“和得分至关重要。 4.句式美 句式单一、缺乏生气的文章,哪怕无任何错误也不
5、可能得高分。考生在写作时,可以巧变感叹句,增强语言的表达力;省略与替代交替使用,避免写作时不必要的重复与累赘,使句子更简练、精确;主动句与被动句交替使用,使句子更具多样性;分词(短语)及with复合结构结合使用,使得文章句子结构紧凑,描述形象生动,为文章增色。 5.衔接美 “有效地使用语句间的连接成分,使全文结构紧凑“是高考书面表达重要的评分依据。,二、注重写作句式,提高写作能力,五校联考作文:,学生作文1:,As is shown in the picture above,the student is pessimistic about his study, even he dont wan
6、t to study at all, which surprises his teacher a lot. As a matter of fact, it is a common condition among the students. Students often owes it to their low IQ rather than seek for their disadvantage. It will have a bad effect on their study. In my view,study is a slow and hard process . To begin wit
7、h, we should have a right attitude towards study. However hard study is, we as long as try our best to learn knowledge which can equip ourselves. In addition a good way to study is also important. Sometimes we cant learn well. Why not change our way to study? Perhaps our changing can make a differen
8、ce on our study. To sum up, study matters for us a lot. We should take our study into consideration seriously. Dont give up our study. Work harder and you will find that you can succeed.,学生作文2:,As is shown in the picture above, a teacher asked a student why he didnt study. What the student said real
9、ly shocked me a lot. The student said that he was too stupid to study. Was it the reason that the student didnt study? Of course not. As a matter of fact, most of people have the same IQ . However, some students are so lazy the they dont want to study hard. In order to escape this responsibility, th
10、ey blame it to their IQ. They make it to be believed that they are too stupid to study or make good progress. Day by day, their study become worse and worse. As far as I am concerned, I hold the point of view that whether our IQ is high or not, we should study hard. And we should try our best to lea
11、rn knowledge . Only by studying hard can we have the life that we want.,教师批改、反馈一:typical mistakes,a common condition,a common phenomenon,He dont,He doesnt,we as long as try our best to learn knowledge which can equip ourselves.,As long as we try our best to learn knowledge, we can equip ourselves.,t
12、ake our study into consideration seriously.,take our study seriously.,Was it the reason that the student didnt study?,Was it the reason why the student didnt study?,教师批改、反馈一:typical mistakes,lose ones heart,as far as I concerned,have a good knowledge in it.,give them some difficult works,make a prog
13、ress,thinking themself is due to IQ which is so low.,lose heart,as far as I am concerned,have a good knowledge of it.,give them some difficult work,make progress,Considering themselves low IQ,高中学生在英语写作中普遍存在的问题,1. 词汇量贫乏,不能随心所欲地表达自己的思想。,2.单词拼写有误,词性混淆,词义辨析不清,用词不当现象 屡见不鲜。,3.语法错误普遍,意思表达含糊不清。,4.句子不完整, 不间断
14、句子, 结构混乱,母语的影响根深蒂固。,5.句子与句子之间缺少衔接, 造成意思过渡不平稳。,6.句式单调,不会灵活地运用多种表达方式。,7.思路狭窄,文章结构松散,缺乏逻辑性。,修改、美化二稿,几种常用美化书面表达的方法,巧搭语言桥 Example,As is shown in the picture above, a student is sleeping during class, his teacher asks him,“why dont you study?”,As is shown in the picture above, a teacher asks a student sle
15、eping during class why he doesnt study.,非谓语动词,As is shown in the picture above, a teacher is questioning a bored student why he would sleep rather than study in class.,What the student said really shocked me a lot. The student said that he was too stupid to study.,It was what the student said that r
16、eally shocked me a lot. The student said that he was too stupid to study.,The student said that he was too stupid to study, which really shocked me.,It shocked me a lot that the student said that he was too stupid to study.,巧搭语言桥 Example,Most peoples IQ is similar, what really influences our study i
17、s our efforts.,With similar IQ, what really influences our study is our efforts.,With similar IQ, it is our efforts that really influences our study.,巧搭语言桥 Example,With 的复合结构,As is shown in the picture above, a student sleeping class is asked why he doesnt study by a teacher.,What the student said r
18、eally shocked me a lot. The student said that he was too stupid to study.,As is shown in the picture above, a teacher asks a student sleeping class why he doesnt study.,I was shocked at what the student said.,主动变为被动,1. 定语从句 There are more than 200 teachers in our school who are all friendly and enth
19、usiastic.,写作中的常用搭桥句式,2. 同位语从句 I hold the view that it is of great help for students to read newspaper.,3. 非谓语充当定语、状语 All in all, voluntary work is a bridge between hearts bringing many strangers together in hard times.,4. 倒装句 1). Nowhere else can we find such a quiet and beautiful place. 2). East of
20、 our school lies a beautiful lake with many birds flying around it.,6. 虚拟语气 Had it not been for the teachers help,he would not have made such rapid progress.,5. as 句式 Young as he is, he has mastered three foreign languages.,7. So that句型 So important is time that we cant afford to waste it.,8. not on
21、lybut also句型 In Yiwu not only can we enjoy the natural scenic beauty, but also we can taste the delicious local production.,9. 强调句型 It was not until she took off her dark glasses that I realized she was a famous,The son is very angry.,They are surprised.,Its their son birthday. There is a birthday c
22、ake and lots of dilicious food on the table.,第一段: possible answer,As is shown in the picture, a birthday cake has been prepared by parents to show their love for their son on his birthday.,Its obvious that their son isnt satisfied and said angrily:“who would have his birthday celebrated at home in t
23、hese days” ?,What their son says surprises them.,The first paragraph:,As is shown in the picture, a a birthday cake has been prepared by parents to show their love for their son on his birthday. Its obvious that their son isnt satisfied and said angrily:“who would have his birthday celebrated at hom
24、e in this day ”? What their son says surprises them.,From the picture we can see,Obviously,Apparently,saying angrily,complaining,which,what,第二段: possible answer,Nowadays, like the boy in the picture, many teenagers think it becomes a fashion to celebrate their birthdays in the restaurants, receivein
25、g various gifts from parents and friends. Whats more, they can have fun by singing,dancing and drinking.,第三段: possible answer,Personally, I think it can be done in a meaningful way. Birthday is much more than an occasion to receive gifts. It is a time for us to express our thanks to our parents in return for their love.,Homework: Finish the composition. Try to beautify your composition by using the patterns you learn today.,Thank you!,
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